1 -- great story, really enjoying it and *definitely* waiting for the next bit. there are a couple of verb tense things going on in this chapter -- switches from past to present, that i caught, but the pacing (as kamikaze_redux pointed out) is pretty nifty.
2 -- kamikaze_redux, your icon is keen. it's giving me ideas. naughty Dean ideas. tee hee!
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Date: 2007-03-22 05:52 pm (UTC)1 -- great story, really enjoying it and *definitely* waiting for the next bit. there are a couple of verb tense things going on in this chapter -- switches from past to present, that i caught, but the pacing (as kamikaze_redux pointed out) is pretty nifty.
2 -- kamikaze_redux, your icon is keen. it's giving me ideas. naughty Dean ideas. tee hee!